Maybe giving freshmen in high school three months to read a book and answer nine detailed questions about it was too much to ask. OR maybe this is what happens when the middle school refuses to hold students back...no matter how ridiculously inferior their abilities are...
1) Change this all into font size 12 Times New Roman and double space it.
Plot- In the high school the boys (what boys?) attend, called youngsters carry knives and guns,
finding ways to dodge the metal detectors they must pass through when they enter the campus. (This sentence doesn’t make sense)
There was a small group of kids that they called themselves "homeys"
and that they deny that they all were a gang struggle to survive amid poverty, drug abuse,
and they also fear of the deadly violence around their neighborhood. (Reword this!) They tried to become
good kids like to be honest and just in case having a gun or knife for protection. When they
see a drug dealer running and hiding from the cops they think that they will always get in
trouble cuz they look like they are thugs. (This summary makes almost no sense. The sentences are unclear and there is very little detail. I can’t understand the full plot of your book after reading this)
Setting- The setting takes place in a city called "Babylon" meaning where a place where evil
things happen. The setting is based in Oakland, California. It seems like the story takes place in
the late 1800's. (Proofread this. Also, the “setting” doesn’t take place; the story takes place. DESCRIBE the setting—add details).
Characters- The main Character in this story called Dante. Another Character is named Pook hes a
good friend of Dante.
(Write a full paragraph description of each and use textual evidence—events from the story—to prove your answer)
Title- The title is named "Babylon Boyz" For me it means that they are kinda scared of other people
and that they live in the getto.
(Proofread! All of those red and green lines under your words means they’re wrong! That isn’t a decoration! Also, come up with an alternate title and explain it. Write more)
Reality- I think some of the events in the story seemed believable. Like when they were walking
down a street and when they saw that the drug dealer was running and that happens most of the
time.
(Add detail. This is way too short)
Interest- What keeped me interested was that the book had awsome slang ways to talk in and this
story was one of my favorite because like the story got even better and better by there personalitys
and their acting.
(Proofread for spelling!!!! Also, quote specific passages from the story to prove/support your points!)
Where are the remaining three questions????
This looks like it was very rushed and clearly not proofread. This needs MAJOR revision before the final draft or you’ll be looking at a MAJOR F.
Rough Draft Grade: D-
Monday, December 11, 2006
Thursday, December 7, 2006
9th Grade Student Book Report
Students were given roughly three months to read a book independently and prepare a book report consisting of nine in depth questions to answer. Here is what I received...
Question 1: Plot-- In a well written summary please tell me everything that happens in your book. Include all of the important details, even the ending.
Student Answer--"Roy moves to Coconut Cove. Roy sees strange running boy with no shoes. Roy punches mean bulloy so he can follow running boy. Dumps out bag of shakes. Running boy saves Roy and leaves him at the golf corse. Police man Mr. Diliclo looks at vandulisum at mother palas all american pancake House. Roy goes to see the running boy he isen'tt here he goes on his bike home he talks to Betris the bear. Mullet fingers the running boy got bit by a dog they had to take him to the hosptil. They go to the mothers palas all american pancake house and they save brourring owls."
Question 5: Reality-- Did the events in the book seem believable to you or did you have to suspend your disbelief? Please choose a few major incidents and describe how realistic you found them to be.
Student Answer-- "This story was real every thing was real like they use buildozers and school buses. they bild a pancake house yea preaty realistic if you ask me."
Personally, I was hoping he would tackle the "Mullet fingers running boy" issue in his reality section, but oh well.
Terrible. F
Question 1: Plot-- In a well written summary please tell me everything that happens in your book. Include all of the important details, even the ending.
Student Answer--"Roy moves to Coconut Cove. Roy sees strange running boy with no shoes. Roy punches mean bulloy so he can follow running boy. Dumps out bag of shakes. Running boy saves Roy and leaves him at the golf corse. Police man Mr. Diliclo looks at vandulisum at mother palas all american pancake House. Roy goes to see the running boy he isen'tt here he goes on his bike home he talks to Betris the bear. Mullet fingers the running boy got bit by a dog they had to take him to the hosptil. They go to the mothers palas all american pancake house and they save brourring owls."
Question 5: Reality-- Did the events in the book seem believable to you or did you have to suspend your disbelief? Please choose a few major incidents and describe how realistic you found them to be.
Student Answer-- "This story was real every thing was real like they use buildozers and school buses. they bild a pancake house yea preaty realistic if you ask me."
Personally, I was hoping he would tackle the "Mullet fingers running boy" issue in his reality section, but oh well.
Terrible. F
Monday, November 27, 2006
Defining Rape
Today, being the first day back from Thanksgiving break, was a day that I expected the students to be a bit lethargic--both physically and mentally (even more so than normal). As such, my lesson plans were catered to the intellectual stupor that I expected. In fact, the first eight minutes of my plans were devoted to the following activity: "Let students find seats." Yes, my classroom is in the same place it always was and no major renovations has, as of yet, affected my end of our construction-ridden school. However, I knew that I would be adding to the impending confusion of the day by doing the unthinkable: I rearranged the desks. Rather than six rows of five desks, students are now expected to maneuver a room with desks set up in concentric semi-circles; ideally this will facilitate discussion, ideally...but I digress.
The class of most interest today, and I have a feeling that this will often be the case, was my basic level juniors. Despite the fact that there are only ten students in that class, more than one had trouble finding a place to sit. In fact, one student entered the class, looked around in bewilderment, sighed, and exited the classroom clearly befuddled. (He did arrive five minutes tardy with no explanation, but he didn't miss anything since the other nine were still playing musical chairs). After that part of the lesson--they got "C"s at best--it was on to part two: a discussion of how I did not grade their papers over the weekend because I was simply too busy playing the new Nintendo Wii. This is the only thing they have understood all semester. Then it was back to utter confusion as we jumped into Beowulf--yes the version that reads like "See Spot Run" and contains fabulous pictures of the epic Anglo-Saxon hero...err...I mean the "tough dude from back then."
Since I finished reading aloud to them and telling them what answers to write down early, I decided they could just "chill" for the rest of class as long as they stayed seated and relatively quiet. So as they all noisily walked around the room, I overheard snippets of conversation that boiled down to the fact that a few guys were making fun of one of the young ladies for hanging out with a twenty-four year old guy. She was getting aggravated, so I told the two males to shut up and be nice. At that point, one of them raised his hand, although he was standing right in front of me, announced, "I have a question." His eyes widened and I could tell that the rusty gears in his head were turning. Slowly and deliberately, he asked a question that was clearly of grave importance to him: "Mr. F., isn't it rape when a twenty four year old talks to a seventeen year old?"
*Sigh
The class of most interest today, and I have a feeling that this will often be the case, was my basic level juniors. Despite the fact that there are only ten students in that class, more than one had trouble finding a place to sit. In fact, one student entered the class, looked around in bewilderment, sighed, and exited the classroom clearly befuddled. (He did arrive five minutes tardy with no explanation, but he didn't miss anything since the other nine were still playing musical chairs). After that part of the lesson--they got "C"s at best--it was on to part two: a discussion of how I did not grade their papers over the weekend because I was simply too busy playing the new Nintendo Wii. This is the only thing they have understood all semester. Then it was back to utter confusion as we jumped into Beowulf--yes the version that reads like "See Spot Run" and contains fabulous pictures of the epic Anglo-Saxon hero...err...I mean the "tough dude from back then."
Since I finished reading aloud to them and telling them what answers to write down early, I decided they could just "chill" for the rest of class as long as they stayed seated and relatively quiet. So as they all noisily walked around the room, I overheard snippets of conversation that boiled down to the fact that a few guys were making fun of one of the young ladies for hanging out with a twenty-four year old guy. She was getting aggravated, so I told the two males to shut up and be nice. At that point, one of them raised his hand, although he was standing right in front of me, announced, "I have a question." His eyes widened and I could tell that the rusty gears in his head were turning. Slowly and deliberately, he asked a question that was clearly of grave importance to him: "Mr. F., isn't it rape when a twenty four year old talks to a seventeen year old?"
*Sigh
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