Another Stellar Book Report

Maybe giving freshmen in high school three months to read a book and answer nine detailed questions about it was too much to ask. OR maybe this is what happens when the middle school refuses to hold students back...no matter how ridiculously inferior their abilities are...

1) Change this all into font size 12 Times New Roman and double space it.

Plot- In the high school the boys (what boys?) attend, called youngsters carry knives and guns,
finding ways to dodge the metal detectors they must pass through when they enter the campus. (This sentence doesn’t make sense)
There was a small group of kids that they called themselves "homeys"
and that they deny that they all were a gang struggle to survive amid poverty, drug abuse,
and they also fear of the deadly violence around their neighborhood. (Reword this!) They tried to become
good kids like to be honest and just in case having a gun or knife for protection. When they
see a drug dealer running and hiding from the cops they think that they will always get in
trouble cuz they look like they are thugs. (This summary makes almost no sense. The sentences are unclear and there is very little detail. I can’t understand the full plot of your book after reading this)

Setting- The setting takes place in a city called "Babylon" meaning where a place where evil
things happen. The setting is based in Oakland, California. It seems like the story takes place in
the late 1800's. (Proofread this. Also, the “setting” doesn’t take place; the story takes place. DESCRIBE the setting—add details).

Characters- The main Character in this story called Dante. Another Character is named Pook hes a
good friend of Dante.

(Write a full paragraph description of each and use textual evidence—events from the story—to prove your answer)

Title- The title is named "Babylon Boyz" For me it means that they are kinda scared of other people
and that they live in the getto.

(Proofread! All of those red and green lines under your words means they’re wrong! That isn’t a decoration! Also, come up with an alternate title and explain it. Write more)

Reality- I think some of the events in the story seemed believable. Like when they were walking
down a street and when they saw that the drug dealer was running and that happens most of the
time.

(Add detail. This is way too short)

Interest- What keeped me interested was that the book had awsome slang ways to talk in and this
story was one of my favorite because like the story got even better and better by there personalitys
and their acting.

(Proofread for spelling!!!! Also, quote specific passages from the story to prove/support your points!)

Where are the remaining three questions????

This looks like it was very rushed and clearly not proofread. This needs MAJOR revision before the final draft or you’ll be looking at a MAJOR F.

Rough Draft Grade: D-